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Wednesday, January 14: Tune It Or Die!

BY WAY OF INTRODUCTION

by Rob Lopresti

Not long ago James put up an assortment of opening lines from his short stories. In November John did the same. Since all the cool kids seem to be doing it I am going to give in to peer pressure and provide some of mine.

In a few cases below I have cheated by including the whole first paragraph. And just for fun I have added the opening lines of three stories that (so far) have not found a home. If you can spot one of the ringers I will be impressed. Catch all three and I’ll hire you as my writing teacher. Oh, the first line below is the first sentence of mine ever to appear in print.

The old man had lived on the hill beyond the village for as long as Pablo could remember.

It was the coldest day of the year, and Sid Burton had forgotten his gloves.

If you’re going to let someone lie to you, Cape May is as good a place for it as any. The scenery’s terrific and the money’s not bad.

“For heaven’s sake, Shanks, try to behave yourself today.”

Marlena Foley had seventeen thousand dollars in the bank, saved up over the years and set aside for her daughter Janet’s college education. One day Marlena took every penny out and went shopping for a car.

“No, thank you,” I said firmly. “I know it sounds trite, but I’m too young to die.”

Dear Mr. Picknell; I know you murdered your wealthy philanthropist wife.

Tourists wandered through the Ramblas like sheep, waiting to be fleeced.

Otis Penfield was terrified, and he had his reasons.

“Do you believe in reincarnation, Victor?” asked Lieutenant Juarez.

Leopold Longshanks did not enjoy playing the fool.

When the sheriff walked into the diner Keegan was sitting at the counter, trying to decide if the scrambled eggs they served here were worse than those at the prison or just different.

I can’t remember what state we’re in.

Now, wouldn’t you think that if someone had been waiting twenty minutes for you they would be glad to see you when you finally arrived?

“I will not bite my nails. I will not bite my nails. I will–”

Bertie Pinch was a mystery.

I was sitting on a park bench, enjoying the Spring sunshine, and trying to guess what kind of cop was sitting next to me.

Ben liked to say that on the night Nils Partiner died he woke up, gasping for breath, heart thumping like a basketball.

It’s a good thing I don’t own a gun, because I sure would have used it that afternoon. I can picture myself cocking the trigger or whatever you call it and letting that joker have it right between the floppy drives.

“How do you feel about blackmail?”

The phone rang while I was bailing out my office.

Someone was shining a bright light in Leopold Longshanks’ eyes and asking him foolish questions.

You can’t solve them all.

Posted in Tune It Or Die! on January 14th, 2009
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6 comments

  1. January 14th, 2009 at 6:02 pm, Dick Stodghill Says:

    I’ll be the first to give up.

  2. January 14th, 2009 at 11:58 pm, Jeff Baker Says:

    Nice addition to this blog’s First Lines Collection! By the way, I snagged a copy of “Thurber On Crime” right after you mentioned it here a week or so ago! Loads of fun!

  3. January 15th, 2009 at 2:38 pm, Rob Says:

    Great. Some day we should write about Mr. Thurber’s first lines.

  4. January 15th, 2009 at 10:55 pm, Jeff Baker Says:

    But could any of them top: “All right, have it your way. You heard a seal bark!”

  5. January 16th, 2009 at 4:30 am, Rob Says:

    Jeff, you probably know that New Yorker has a weekly contest where you are supposed to send in a caption for a cartoon. Half the time I am tempted to send in the seal bark one. Sure, it would make no sense, but it would still be funnier than some of their finalists.

    And then there’s the kangaroo in the courtroom…

  6. January 17th, 2009 at 12:40 am, Jeff Baker Says:

    Rob, I didn’t know that! I’ll have to try that!
    Thanks!

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